寫作專項訓(xùn)練---安慰信

【知識點】

安慰信的文體結(jié)構(gòu)，思路訓(xùn)練，寫作注意事項及實戰(zhàn)演練

【高考考向】

高考書面表達的重點考察文體是書信。經(jīng)常考的題型有邀請信、建議信、口頭通知、申請信、投訴信、安慰信和道歉信。

【高考真題】

（2014年安徽卷）

為了幫助中學(xué)生健康成長，某中學(xué)英文報開辟了“HEART-TO-HEART”專欄。假設(shè)你是該欄目的編輯Jamie，收到一封署名為Worried的求助信。信中該同學(xué)向你訴說了自己的困擾：近日容易發(fā)脾氣，使正常的學(xué)習(xí)和生活受到了影響。請用英文給該同學(xué)寫一封回信。

內(nèi)容要點如下：

1．表示理解并給予安慰；

2．提出建議并說明理由。

注意：

1．詞數(shù)120左右；

2．信中不能出現(xiàn)與本人相關(guān)的信息；

3．信的開頭與結(jié)尾已為你擬好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

參考詞匯：temper n. 脾氣，情緒

Hi Worried,

I’m sorry to know that you’re having such a hard time at the moment. __________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours,

Jamie

Possible version:

Hi Worried，

I’m sorry to know that you’re having such a bad time at the moment. The truth is that everyone will have one of those periods when things seem to be going wrong, so you don’t have to worry so much. The important thing is to learn to control your temper so that you may not do or say anything you’ll regret. Here are three useful tips.

First, talk to someone you trust about how you feel. This is a good way of letting your anger out without hurting others or yourself. Second, go outdoors and play team games with your friends as physical exercise is an effective way to get rid of anger. And third, remain optimistic about your future. Such a positive attitude towards life can be helpful in lifting your spirits.

I hope you’ll soon feel calmer and carry on as normal.

Yours,

Jamie

安慰信

1．慰問信的基本結(jié)構(gòu)

慰問信是向不幸者、愁苦者、生病者、失敗者等表示安慰、同情和鼓勵的信件。這類信要寫得感情真誠，措辭貼切。要圍繞一個中心，鼓勵對方并讓其從中得到安慰和鼓舞。

寫信時常包括：對不幸事件表示同情和安慰→給予建議幫助，鼓勵其努力→再次表示同情（鼓勵）并寄予美好希望。

一、開頭句型

1.  I was (awfully) sorry to hear that + 句子 (your team lost the game.)

2.  I was shocked to hear of + sth. (your failure in the exam.)

3.  I’m writing to tell you how sorry I am to hear about sth. (your loss …)

4.  Knowing your situation, I feel terribly sorry about sth.…

二.、中間段句型

1. I quiet understand how you feel now，but ... 我特別能理解你現(xiàn)在的感覺，但...

2. You have devoted yourself to ...  你在...方面付出了大量的精力和時間

3. But as we all know, it is extremely difficult to do ... 但是眾所周知，做...本身就極其困難

4. To prepare ... , you have made every effort. 為了準(zhǔn)備這次... ,你已經(jīng)盡了最大努力

5. It’s not your fault to do ...   .....不是你的錯

三、結(jié)尾句型

1.  If there is anything you need me to do, don’t hesitate to let me know.

2.  If I can do anything for you, do let me know.

3.  Remember, we won’t be far away if you need any help!

4.  I hope you can find my encouragement helpful. Best wishes.

【學(xué)生學(xué)情分析】

在寫過綿陽二診作文之后，學(xué)生暴露出了一些問題，但對如何合理表達安慰，還有很多問題，故再做進一步講解，讓學(xué)生能緊扣要點，合理得體地完成安慰信內(nèi)容的表達。

【建議變式練習(xí)】

（1）

假如你是李華，你的美國筆友Mike來信說他現(xiàn)在心情很不好，因為在上周結(jié)束的?；@球比賽中，他所在的班級籃球隊以一分之差輸了。請你寫一封信安慰他。

Dear Mike,

I was very sorry to hear that your team lost the basketball match last weekend. It’s understandable for you to be in a bad mood. However, if you can adopt different perspectives, the loss may be a blessing.

First, it’s normal to lose in a basketball match, for you can either win or lose. If you’ve tried your best, why not lift your spirits to face up to（直面）the result? Anyway, the essence of competition lies not in victory but in participation. Besides, you can also benefit from your loss by figuring out your strengths and weaknesses. Therefore, if your team endeavors(盡力) to overcome the disadvantages, you will win sooner or later.

I hope you can find my encouragement helpful. Best wishes.

Yours,

Li Hua

（2）

假定你是李華，從報紙上得知你的美國筆友James的家鄉(xiāng)遭遇了颶風(fēng)。請你用英語給他寫一封電子郵件，給予關(guān)心和安慰。

注意：

1. 詞數(shù)100左右（開頭和結(jié)尾已給出，但不計入總詞數(shù)）；

2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

Dear James,

__________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

慰問信的正文通常分為三部分：

第一部分：引入話題（同情對方遭遇，表明寫信目的）；

第二部分：表示慰問（向?qū)Ψ降奶幘潮硎纠斫狻㈥P(guān)心，并給予鼓勵或者提供幫助等）；

第三部分：總結(jié)全文（希望可以提供幫助）。

Dear James,

I was greatly shocked to learn that a hurricane took place in your hometown from today’s newspaper. I am writing to extend my deepest sympathy.

It broke my heart to see lots of homes had been destroyed in the tragic hurricane. I can imagine how difficult this time must be for you and your family. But where there’s life there’s hope. Some organisations in my country are launching various campaigns to call on people to donate money in the hope that you can go through the difficulties as soon as possible.

Please pass my concerns on to your parents. If I can be of any help, don’t hesitate to let me know.

Yours sincerely,

Li Hua

（3）安慰情緒低落的朋友

假如你是李華，最近收到了你的美國朋友Jenny的來信。她在信中說，由于剛進入高中，還不能適應(yīng)新的環(huán)境，不知道如何去結(jié)交新朋友，因而情緒低落。請根據(jù)以下內(nèi)容給她回信。

1. 向Jenny表示問候和慰問；

2. 針對她的問題提出以下建議：

放學(xué)后邀請同學(xué)一起參加活動；  

你的同學(xué)遇到麻煩時，你去幫助他們；

你遇到困難時向同學(xué)求助。

注意：

1.詞數(shù)100左右；

2.可適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3.信的開頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫好，不計入總詞數(shù)。

Dear Jenny,

I am really sorry to hear that you feel bad after entering the high school.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________   Best wishes!

Yours,

Li Hua

Dear Jenny,

I am really sorry to hear that you feel bad after entering the high school. I’d like to talk about it with you.

In fact, in your senior high school, your classmates are also new and facing the same problem, so you don’t have to worry too much about it. There is also something that you can do to change this situation. First, try to invite some of your classmates to take part in some activities together after school. This will help you understand each other better than communicating with others. Then, help your classmates when they are in trouble and ask them to help you when you have difficulty.

I believe you will make many new friends and you will have a happy school life there.

Best wishes

Yours,

Li Hua

（4）

假定你是李華，你的美國朋友Tony因考試發(fā)揮失常，成績不理想而情緒低落。請給他寫封信表示安慰，要點如下：

　　1)表示難過和理解；    　    2)找出錯誤原因并及時改正；

　　3) 鼓勵他重拾自信，實現(xiàn)夢想。

Dear Tony,

　　I'm sorry to hear that you didn't do well in your exam and that you are very worried about your study. I quiet understand how you feel now.

　　There is no doubt that we should keep a good state of mind. As we know, failure is the mother of success. We should spare no efforts to analyze the cause of failure, which could help us find out the mistakes we made and try to make up for the lack of knowledge and skills in those areas. Only in this way can we make progress in our study.

　　I hope that by the time this letter reaches you, you'll be feeling much better. Let's work hard together and turn our dream into reality.

　                 　Yours,

　                 　Li Hua

（5）

  假定你是李華，你的同班同學(xué)王剛家鄉(xiāng)10月4日遭受臺風(fēng)“彩虹(Typhoon Mujigae)”襲擊，洪水毀壞了家園，你作為班長給正在抗洪的他寫一封慰問信，要點如下：

1. 對該同學(xué)表示關(guān)心；

2. 向其提供一些幫助，如捐助和補習(xí)；

3. 表達希望和對其重建家園的信心。

注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右；  2. 可以適當(dāng)增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫；

3. 開頭語和結(jié)束語已為你寫好。

Dear Wang Gang,

We’re so sorry to hear that a horrible and severe Typhoon Mujigae hit your hometown and your house is in ruins. We’re filled with deep sorrow. Please convey my sympathy to your family. Thinking about your present situation, we cannot wait a minute to make every bit of our effort to help you. I, as a monitor, on behalf of our class, express our most sincere pity and care for you. Besides, we make a donation of some money, expecting that it can help you go through the difficulty. We believe that with the help of so many kind people, a better house can be rebuilt. Finally, we’re all hoping you’ll be back soon and we will make up the lessons for you.

Best wishes!

 Yours sincerely,

                                                          Li Hua

撰文：韓艷平 楊佳順

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